Response to Guillem's Calisthenic.
This piece is interesting because you have abstracted away from the original details and created a scene that is mysterious yet comprehensible. "Between a ghost town and a village" is great phrasing because it stretches to encompass several meanings, both the literal (geographical) and metaphorical. The lines "their home not jet black space / but the flesh of a child" is captivating because it flirts well with the macabre.
For a future draft, I would recommend increasing the level of specificity and elaborating the specific scene. Who is this character Augusta, and this cat? How can we de-familiarize the cat, and create new fodder for the ghost town?
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