Response to Drika's Free Entry.
Great entry Drika!
Two great features:
Your attempt to write about a specific person and relationship is great, because gives you a lot of material to cull from.
The bold statement - "I am the image of my mother" - is amazing and grabs hold of my (any reader's) attention immediately. It spurs me to read on.
Point of improvement:
Specificity. This piece is rather abstract. What parts of your mother image is "shaped" by "tough times"? Perhaps her palms are rough like my mother’s hands. How exactly are you similar to your mother? Try looking in a mirror, and describing every feature that is in your "mother’s image". More detail will make the piece more captivating, and allow you to "discover" the generated subject without trying to.
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